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Cara 6/2/05 23:04

This comic touches a chord with me; Meri Lin and I have something in common. Becoming too 'American' is considred bad by our families and it's ridiculous.
I have no complaints about the script (very good!) but the artwork is not as quite good as comic #2. Panel 6 is the one that needs the most improvement--her hand and phone are too small, especially since the phone was big enough to be seen in Panel 5 from the opposite side of her face and her eye size is much bigger in panel 6 than in 5.
I did really like the drawing of the photograph with the family in traditional Chinese garb--that was my favorite panel. :)

wingedpanda 6/3/05 7:11

Fine, call us lurkers out. See if I care.
I'm reading - I like it. ^_^ Meri Lin is very cute.

Dan M. 6/3/05 10:47

I like that I can sort of get a feel for what this might be about and maybe where it's going. I would just advise that you don't wait too long to introduce some sort of action and forward motion to avoid risking it becoming stale.
As far as the art work, I really liked panels 3,5 and 8 mainly because you get a real good feel for the look of the characters. Again I like the different shades/colors for the different time frames which is actually really important to do.
The story is based on an interesting topic that I am somewhat familiar with. With this topic I think you could definitely make something of it. I am looking forward to the next comic mainly to see your art skills blossom further. Keep it up!

Fred 6/3/05 11:35

Meepmeepmeep!! I like your comic!! :) I look forward to reading more about the characters, and their personalities and backgrounds. You create really cool characters.

mikey 6/5/05 6:46

Great drawings the story begins to take more form keep with it and keep me informed

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Cara	6/2/05	23:04
This comic touches a chord with me; Meri Lin and I have something in common. Becoming too 'American' is considred bad by our families and it's ridiculous. I have no complaints about the script (very good!) but the artwork is not as quite good as comic #2. Panel 6 is the one that needs the most improvement--her hand and phone are too small, especially since the phone was big enough to be seen in Panel 5 from the opposite side of her face and her eye size is much bigger in panel 6 than in 5. I did really like the drawing of the photograph with the family in traditional Chinese garb--that was my favorite panel. :)
wingedpanda	6/3/05	7:11
Fine, call us lurkers out. See if I care. I'm reading - I like it. ^_^ Meri Lin is very cute.
Dan M.	6/3/05	10:47
I like that I can sort of get a feel for what this might be about and maybe where it's going. I would just advise that you don't wait too long to introduce some sort of action and forward motion to avoid risking it becoming stale. As far as the art work, I really liked panels 3,5 and 8 mainly because you get a real good feel for the look of the characters. Again I like the different shades/colors for the different time frames which is actually really important to do. The story is based on an interesting topic that I am somewhat familiar with. With this topic I think you could definitely make something of it. I am looking forward to the next comic mainly to see your art skills blossom further. Keep it up!
Fred	6/3/05	11:35
Meepmeepmeep!! I like your comic!! :) I look forward to reading more about the characters, and their personalities and backgrounds. You create really cool characters.
mikey	6/5/05	6:46
Great drawings the story begins to take more form keep with it and keep me informed